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Bird
It's always one of these
perennial Tuesday afternoons
when the sky boasts
an unpaintable blue
and the clouds catwalk by
in their god-faced caricatures of you
that makes a bird of me.
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If hearts had wings... very enjoyable. I hung up briefly on "cat" in relation to "bird." Not a critique thread, but -- "cakewalk by" ?
Non-practicing atheist
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(06-20-2018, 08:30 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Bird
It's always one of these
perennial Tuesday afternoons
when the sky boasts
an unpaintable blue
and the clouds catwalk by
in their god-faced caricatures of you
that makes a bird of me.
Might be an idea to start at “Tuesday”, though the last line will also have to change to reflect the new sentence structure
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*bows down on knees*
this one's a keeper.
assholery not intended .
