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Thunbergia

Thunbergia
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#1
02-07-2018, 08:52 PM
The vine
catches a flower
plucked by the wind.
[Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9Qgwfm9NUY8]
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#2
02-08-2018, 03:13 AM
The title is a wonderful sounding word, and it's a lovely image. I would cut "the" from the last line myself, but it's great.
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