His Asshole in Prison (Language Obviously)

[Todd]

The circumference
of an Eisenhower silver dollar.

[Lawrence]

I wish you would've written a poem about me instead of Billy.

Funny as hell!

[billy]

the poem and the comment are genuinely funny

as a couplet and a short poem i think it and the title excellent.

that said i wish you would have allowed the poem to grow in to a

trio or more of couplets on a similar theme.

thanks for the laugh

[Todd]

Thanks Lawrence. I'm going to treat this like Carly Simon (You're So Vain). I would identify the asshole in question until I auction the information off later for a hundred thousand dollars (or Euros if the dollar continues to tank).

Billy: Thanks. I did a longer version but decided that I liked the concise one more. Here it is for the hell of it:

His Asshole in Prison

Inflation Reversed
Dimes become

The circumference
of an Eisenhower silver dollar

[billy]

Thanks Lawrence. I'm going to treat this like Carly Simon (You're So Vain). I would identify the asshole in question until I auction the information off later for a hundred thousand dollars (or Euros if the dollar continues to tank).

Billy: Thanks. I did a longer version but decided that I liked the concise one more. Here it is for the hell of it:

His Asshole in Prison

Inflation Reversed
Dimes become

The circumference
of an Eisenhower silver dollar

i enjoyed the couplet on it's own.

what meant was three or four or more couplets saying the exact same thing
in a different way;

The circumference
of an Eisenhower silver dollar

fellow inmates
used it as a slot machine

when it paid out
it paid in shit



just an idea where i think you could take it.

[Todd]

Remind me not to get in a humor duel with you...that was brilliantly funny.

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I'll give it some thought though from your example I'm thinking more of the currency of cigarettes and a cigarette machine. I'll give it some thought.

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I'm not calling this one a revision Billy so I'm not putting it up top yet. Your version is great. I find that when I add more lines I probably get less funny...something like:

The circumference
of an Eisenhower silver dollar

Today’s currency:
cigarettes stuck in the machine.

Smashed open
to satisfy the exercise yard.

[billy]

i like the last one. i think the difference between ud is this, you tend to write poetry i tend to write funny stories hehe.

i really think you could have a series, you have a good thing going on here.
his ass hole in prison series
his hopes and aspirations upon release series

were as buoyant
as whale shit

his mouth as a young man series.

was the newyork sewer
after the rains

it's effin endless.

[Todd]

Agreed. What will likely happen is I will start this, I'll become famous for it, and I'll be known as that Asshole Poet.

Which is ironic because I think my next poem title for the prompt will have the word assholes in it...sigh.

[billy]

an assholian poet hehe
i like it, a new poetic form. assolian.