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Paper plates
are good for mixing paints,
and Jenny Agutter
makes my heart flutter—
but, why's there a hole in my wall?
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I agree with the first statement, no idea who Jenny Agutter is but accept that she's a heart-flutterer, but how these fit with the final line, or the title, bewilders me. Perhaps the drifting thoughts of a man mowing a lawn, finally noticing he's done some damage with the lawnmower?
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The last line is a question that doesn't seem that rhetorical. The protagonist doesn't know why, and I, as a reader,
am content to accept the mystery if necessary. Though I think it might have something to do with the obviously ironic lines:
"Paper plates / are good for mixing paints" since they're utterly unsuitable for this purpose. I think the whole poem revolves
around Jenny Agutter, as each line, especially the "hole" one, can be directly linked to one of her characters.
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(05-21-2017, 09:02 AM)rayheinrich Wrote: The last line is a question that doesn't seem that rhetorical. The protagonist doesn't know why, and I, as a reader,
am content to accept the mystery if necessary. Though I think it might have something to do with the obviously ironic lines:
"Paper plates / are good for mixing paints" since they're utterly unsuitable for this purpose. I think the whole poem revolves
around Jenny Agutter, as each line, especially the "hole" one, can be directly linked to one of her characters.
I wanted to say 'Paper plates ARE suitable for mixing paint, or using as a temporary palette, for an artist. Nothing ironic there, for me.' but we're not supposed to comment on a crit, so I won't. >  <
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(05-21-2017, 09:45 AM)just mercedes Wrote: (05-21-2017, 09:02 AM)rayheinrich Wrote: The last line is a question that doesn't seem that rhetorical. The protagonist doesn't know why, and I, as a reader,
am content to accept the mystery if necessary. Though I think it might have something to do with the obviously ironic lines:
"Paper plates / are good for mixing paints" since they're utterly unsuitable for this purpose. I think the whole poem revolves
around Jenny Agutter, as each line, especially the "hole" one, can be directly linked to one of her characters. I wanted to say 'Paper plates ARE suitable for mixing paint, or using as a temporary palette, for an artist. Nothing ironic there, for me.' but we're not supposed to comment on a crit, so I won't. > < Oh... I just remembered rolling one up and trying to mix a gallon of house paint with it. Total mess.
But artsy paint... yeah, makes sense unless you have cats.
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Ha, Ray's in a literal mood. And we're in fun, we can comment on his funny shoelaces if it's good for a giggle. Or a smirk.
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(05-21-2017, 07:44 AM)shemthepenman Wrote: Paper plates
are good for mixing paints,
and Jenny Agutter
makes my heart flutter—
but, why's there a hole in my wall?
there was something about jenny agutter that made young boys and men stutter
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(05-21-2017, 10:23 AM)ellajam Wrote: Ha, Ray's in a literal mood. And we're in fun, we can comment on his funny shoelaces if it's good for a giggle. Or a smirk. And I just thought my cats found them funny...
(05-21-2017, 11:20 AM)billy Wrote: (05-21-2017, 07:44 AM)shemthepenman Wrote: Paper plates
are good for mixing paints,
and Jenny Agutter
makes my heart flutter—
but, why's there a hole in my wall?
there was something about jenny agutter that made young boys and men stutter "Stutter", so that's what they're calling it now.
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Yes. I fully endorse all of this.
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(05-21-2017, 10:41 PM)shemthepenman Wrote: Yes. I fully endorse all of this. As I, you excellent source of thought, endorse you. (Remuneration optional.)
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