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[ellajam]

Beauty

[bena]

Wow that was one helluva spoiler. Are we saying hi to anybody? Should I say HI to someone?

Welcome whomever I've not welcomed. Get in line, pull down your pants and bend over. It only hurts for a moment.

Oh yeah, here's the cookies and koolaid. It eases the pain!

[rayheinrich]

Wow that was one helluva spoiler.  Are we saying hi to anybody? (of course,
we're saying hi to gingerquiet, see below)  Should I say HI to someone?
(No, it would only upset them.)  

Welcome whomever I've not welcomed.  Get in line, pull down your pants and bend over.  
It only hurts for a moment.
Oh yeah, here's the cookies and koolaid. It eases the pain!

Vaseline, Morphine, and some form of "really lots and lots of chocolate" would
be my choice. Well, all of the above and bena; she has this way about her... ah, the mystique
of true artists! (It's ok, I'm free, I can flirt now.    ) Though, technically, anyone
who considers the above flirting is not someone who understands the concept of
creepy.

Hi gingerquiet! (I hope you don't mind me using you as proof that this post is
absolutely and tragically on topic.) The above is considered a big-sized welcome
from a few of the various indwellers of this porcine sty. I might be concerned you'd
be concerned, but anyone who states: "I will say I had a serious case of internet-nostalgia
when I saw an option for entering your ICQ on the profile page, holy cats I'd forgotten that
was even a thing. Major high school flashback, which I guess is appropriate if I'm going to be
writing poetry for my inner angst monster." is totally cognizant; and, since the ICQ
client application and service were released in 1996, must be at least 19 years old which is,
thank the gods, of legal age. (I, by the way, was more than 19 years old in 1996 and so were
milo, Leanne, ChristopherSea, Tiger the Lion, ellajam, RiverNotch (anyone using Talking Heads
as an avatar instantly dates themselves), and... bena. billy, of course, is four. Anyone else and
cjchaffin is twelve years old and pretending to be whatever sex they're not.

But as I was saying: Welcome!

as sincere as always,
ray heinrich

(who, to the best of my knowledge, is but one of two [ChristopherSea being
the other] pigpeners who is not a coward [and/or free of certain legal restrictions
involving far more than lying, cheating, and stealing] and actually uses his/her real name!)

[bena]

Hey! I would have used my real name but both mel and melanie were taken when I tried. I don't like to add weird numbers, and having both names sans space is something I would need a good sedative for.

Hi gingerquiet! I am not nearly as creepy as ray thinks I am. He's lived a very sheltered life since his claws were removed, and oh yeah, we shipped him to the shelter.

[rayheinrich]

Hey!  I would have used my real name but both mel and melanie were taken when I tried.  I don't like to add weird numbers, and having both names sans space is something I would need a good sedative for.  

Hi gingerquiet! I am not nearly as creepy as ray thinks I am.  He's lived a very sheltered life since his claws were removed, and oh yeah, we shipped him to the shelter.

                       

[billy]

welcome to all the new guys

[amararose]

Hi im new here i love to write and hope to give and get a lot of feed back im 17 and no this isnt my real name hope to have fun with everyone

[milo]

Hi im new here i love to write and hope to give and get a lot of feed back im 17 and no this isnt my real name hope to have fun with everyone

Great to meet you. Have fun.

(What is your real name?)

[billy]

me me, have fun with me....her name is 17 i think milo

welcome to the site

[ellajam]

me me, have fun with me....her name is 17 i think milo

welcome to the site

We already have a 71, think we'll get them confused?

Welcome to the site, Amararose.

[bena]

First red marker: find the period. You know, that little dot that tells people you are done with a thought. I know its overrated and overused, but it does help.

Stay away from billy.
Hell stay away from us all, but yet, post and learn.

You made need a teleporter to pop in and post then pop out.

Welcome aboard!

bena (not my real name. It's mel)

PS I sell teleporters and periods cheap.

[rayheinrich]

First red marker: find the period.  You know, that little dot that tells people you are done with a thought.  I know its overrated and overused, but it does help.  

Stay away from billy.  
Hell stay away from us all, but yet, post and learn.

You made need a teleporter to pop in and post then pop out.

Welcome aboard!

bena (not my real name.  It's mel)

PS I sell teleporters and periods cheap.

See the above?  A few days from now you're going to write this beautiful poem
and all some idiot will comment on is the lack of a period.

The Brits, by the way, don't call it a 'period', they call it a 'full stop'. This is important
to know because there seem to be lot of Brits* here. And yes, this makes it more difficult
to learn to write properly. At least you can take solace in the unproven belief that hardship
builds character (even though it sometimes kills you as well).

BUT, there are many many more wonderful people here (even the idiot fixated on periods
isn't a bad sort, notwithstanding the teleporters are a bit dodgy. [Did I just use 'dodgy'?
Damn, see, those Brits ARE a bad influence.])

Welcome!

ray



(*If you happen to be a Brit, I offer my condolences.)

[Todd]

Hello, my name is Noah and I came on here to get feedback for my poetry. My poems are usually of a religious nature, if that offends you, I apologize. Much of my inspiration comes from the Church, classical music, and my own kinda musings about deep stuff. Sorry If I ever come across as pretentious or arrogant.

Hi Noah,

Welcome to the site! Religious poems don't bother me in the slightest--though they can as hard to pull off well as love poems. I'll be interested to critique your take on them.

Best,

Todd 

[rayheinrich]

Hello, my name is Noah and I came on here to get feedback for my poetry.
My poems are usually of a religious nature, if that offends you, I apologize.
Much of my inspiration comes from the Church, classical music, and my own
kinda musings about deep stuff. Sorry If I ever come across as pretentious or arrogant.

Some people here will be a bit more skeptical of religious poems.
It's mostly (but not entirely) because they have been exposed to SO
many badly written poems having religious topics that they have
become predisposed to assume they're all bad.

As has been mentioned above, some of the hardest poems to write well
deal with religion and love (and I'll add politics). Any topic a writer
is passionate about, impairs her/his ability to write.

This creates a serious dilemma as it's passion that creates the inspiration
good writing depends on.

To become an accomplished writer, you need to learn how to control your passion
without weakening it*.

That's one of the things you can learn here (another is how to be ridiculous).

Welcome,
ray



*The most important technique, in my opinion, is to learn to write in stages.
The first employ wanton passion; the latter control(edit) it.

[ellajam]

Hello, my name is Noah and I came on here to get feedback for my poetry. My poems are usually of a religious nature, if that offends you, I apologize. Much of my inspiration comes from the Church, classical music, and my own kinda musings about deep stuff. Sorry If I ever come across as pretentious or arrogant.

Hi, Noah, welcome to the Pig Pen. Just remember to give a bit more than you receive and you'll be fine. Thanks for the crit you've given already.

Hope you enjoy the site.

[Emphasis]

'Ello, my name is Pedro and I'm here for feedback on my poetry. I'm mostly a love poet but I've been trying to branch out with trying new things with my writing in recent years, I hope it's okay if I post some of my older stuff here. I have an account on hellopoetry and writerscafe, but I really just want some critique, which those places don't offer up a whole lot of. I'd also like to meet other poets, I enjoy making new friends to discuss and chat with.

[bena]

Hola, pedro.

There's thousands of sites on the web that I call "showcase" sites...you post, they leave really vague crits like "Nice work" etc...gets old huh? Well, you've come to the right place....we'll put you to work (in good way.)

One last question...are you any good at making banana bread?
Really craving some today.


bena/mel.

[Mark101]

Hello Each,

I'm looking forward to finding my way around your forum. I can't claim to be any great critic, but I know what I like, and I promise to be kind LOL.

I've been writing poetry for years, but never did anything with it apart from letting it take up space on my hard drive. So I decided to share some of it and see if others think there is any merit to it, or not as the case may be.

Thanks, and looking forward to workshopping with you all.

Mark

[Leanne]

Hi Mark, don't worry about being kind, just be as honest and thorough as you can -- we will appreciate that more.

[rayheinrich]

Hola, pedro.

There's thousands of sites on the web that I call "showcase" sites...you post, they leave really vague crits like "Nice work" etc...gets old huh?  Well, you've come to the right place....we'll put you to work (in good way.)

One last question...are you any good at making banana bread?
Really craving some today.

bena/mel.

    Do NOT feed this woman any banana bread after midnight.