Welcome To October Country

[mackzmike]

Welcome To October Country
 
Welcome to October Country
Where wickedness
Breathes softly in
The fanciful minds of children
Hazy streets hide mysteries
In dark, sweeping trees
Rustic hills become playground
For fantastic beasts
Who dance to howling winds
Under salmon-colored skies
They gather
 At the witching hour, and
Together, they wage war on the ordinary.
Transient carnivals whirl into towns and
Captivate the inhabitants 
In shaded illusion
Chilling tales manipulate reality,
And conjured shadows of the supernatural
Haunt the mystics into dark spells of
Madness 
Here, enigmatic tunes swirl and twirl the mind
And shatter the shackles of normalcy,
So that for just one month,
We can be free from the known.
 

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Mack. This piece would benefit from A: ditching the caps at the start of each line, and B: a little more punctuation for clarity. Otherwise the reader has a lot of guessing to do. Since this is in "fun" I will try to illustrate in a "fun way.

Welcome To October Country
 
Welcome to October Country
where wickedness
breathes softly.

In the fanciful minds of children
hazy streets hide mysteries.

In dark, sweeping trees
rustic hills become playground
for fantastic beasts
who dance to howling winds
under salmon-colored skies.

They gather
 at the witching hour, and
together, they wage war on the ordinary.

Transient carnivals whirl into towns and
captivate the inhabitants .

In shaded illusion
chilling tales manipulate reality,
and conjured shadows of the supernatural
haunt the mystics into dark spells of
madness .

Here, enigmatic tunes swirl and twirl the mind
and shatter the shackles of normalcy,
so that for just one month,
we can be free from the known.
 

As I said, this is in fun so I don't mean to get carried away. This could be read several ways depending on the reader. Punctuation is like road signs. Tell the reader where you want them to go. Now you can tell me where to go! 
Welcome to the site.
Paul

[Bunx]

I do enjoy this poem as well, took a look at Tiger's edit and I have to agree with him. When you block together ideas into stanza's it is alot clearer for the reader to find your ideas and separate them from line to line making the piece a better whole. Thanks again for the read!