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Where is fancy bread,
at the market…or
at home instead?
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Sweet sentiment, although I sort of disagree with the ellipsis, this being all short already. Also, and I really couldn't resist,
At your mother's home --
still in the oven, in fact:
guess who's the baker?
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with apologies to both authors:-
Tell me where is fancy bread:
in the mart, or homey-stead,
with nougat and cream nourished?
Reply, reply.
'Tis endangered by franchise,
like formulaic storefront pies
beloved only of the flies.
What if I said fancy bread
was in a lass's drawers instead,*
with a heigh and a ho and a heigh nonnino?
*desk drawers, where she stores foreign currency, you pervert!
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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I accept your apology, not for the verse, which was fun, but for rhyming "nourished" with "bread" and "stead" -- or at least that's how I read it.
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(02-11-2016, 01:15 AM)RiverNotch Wrote: I accept your apology, not for the verse, which was fun, but for rhyming "nourished" with "bread" and "stead" -- or at least that's how I read it.
Ah - no, it's a spoof of 'Tell me where is fancy bred' from the Merchant of Venice!
the last strophe is an allusion to another poem, 'It was a lover and his lass' - from Love's Labour's Lost
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(02-11-2016, 01:16 AM)Achebe Wrote: (02-11-2016, 01:15 AM)RiverNotch Wrote: I accept your apology, not for the verse, which was fun, but for rhyming "nourished" with "bread" and "stead" -- or at least that's how I read it.
Ah - no, it's a spoof of 'Tell me where is fancy bred' from the Merchant of Venice!
the last strophe is an allusion to another poem, 'It was a lover and his lass' - from Love's Labour's Lost See, it still hurts (it always does -- I would smack all the poets of their time for it, if I had the chance) and having read the Merchant of Venice a bunch of times now, it only hurts even more that I didn't notice that.
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You were both being so clever you missed the pun, but points to cleverness, especially cross referencing to another poem.
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Where then is Fancy bred,
well at home is what she said.
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Where is fancy bread or bred?
A pun, they say -- well I say, nay!
For I, a boulanger Alsatian,
am also a lover of shepherds --!
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Well the third would follow the second, but have nothing to do with the first.
I noticed your new avatar, is that what your name hinges on?
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Nah, it just looks the most like me, is why I chose it.
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Unhinged - nice visual pun
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An unhinged butt, yes. Or perhaps a butt unhinged.
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So I guess you are very holy?
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Just a little holiness around the edges.
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Hard as nails otherwise
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