Addiction and back again back again (Warning - Adult content language)

[Frankee_thecat]

Roman Catholic, gone spastic,  
throw down, wrong crowd.    
   
Soothe My Soul stanzas,    
divvied in neat lines.  
   
FAR OUT, Dee-vine,  
Great OK, bit-shit; fuckwit  
   
You’re doing it Again.    
   
fuckwit, bit-shit, OK Great  
Dee-vine, FAR OUT  
   
Lines neat, into divided  
Stanzas Soul My Soothe  
   
Crowd wrong, down thrown  
Spastic gone, Catholic Roman  

[Erthona]

If one can take anything from the title it might be, once a Catholic always a Catholic. The poem itself seems to say being a Catholic does little for a person. I lay out the meaning as it is not at all clear. Overall the poems meaning comes across as fairly immature, very black and white sort of thinking. I'm not saying that is how the writer intended it, I am saying that is how it tends to read. Along with the somewhat childish language " bit-shit; fuckwit" it is not that far advanced from elementary school children saying do-do and giggling because it is a forbidden word. I suppose one could call it sensationalism, but that hardly makes a poem. One can say that the Pope is a sadist and rapes baby boys and girls while nuns lick his ass, and while it may be shocking, it has no basis in reality and has no claim to art. That is to say, just saying gross or disgusting things, especially out of context and contrary to reality is little different than two second grade boys saying do-do.
In terms of form:

The first two lines appear to have some form:

"Roman Catholic, gone spastic,
throw down, wrong crowd. "

but this is completely abandoned for the rest of the poem.
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Personal: Sometimes it is difficult to write the "truth" as one would like to as that feel to scary, however that is what poetry is really about, writing the truth. As we mature it is about writing "The Truth", but I'll not get into that debate here. Starting out it is important to strive to write the most truth one can, with out covering it up with other things/gimmicks. It is not an easy process as it makes one vulnerable to the world. "Art is Pain", but not through self abuse, but by telling the truth when people might laugh at you when you've laid yourself open to them. No one says it has to be done is one step. It can be gradual, just as long as one is conscious of the process and is actively participating in it.

Best, look forward to future endeavors,

dale

[Frankee_thecat]

Wow dale, thank you so much

for an extremely thoughtful and provoking criticism.

every word appreciated. I'll read this many times.

thanks again!