< i dreamt of you last night >

[rayheinrich]

                                   

                                                          < i dreamt of you last night >
                                                               
                                                                and here
                                                                me
                                                                writing this poem
                                                               
                                                                you spoke to me
                                                               
                                                                in words i can't write
                                                               
                                                                            - - -

[Achebe]

Do the dashes at the end mean more's to come?

[rayheinrich]

Do the dashes at the end mean more's to come?

The opposite, they mean it's the end of the poem.
I guess I should probably use "...", but that's hard to see sometimes, so I use "- - -".

[Keith]

                                   

                                                          < i dreamt of you last night >
                                                               
                                                                and here
                                                                me
                                                                writing this poem
                                                               
                                                                you spoke to me
                                                               
                                                                in words i can't write
                                                               
                                                                            - - -

A lovely way to capture that special bond between us and animals, the little gestures that tell us so much. Very nice. Best Keith

[Tiger the Lion]

For a moment I wanted the title to be "i dreamt of you again last night" - a good iambic title for a non-metered poem. 

Wonderful, self-fulfilling poem. Tender beyond the sum of its words.
Paul

[rayheinrich]

For a moment I wanted the title to be "i dreamt of you again last night" - a good iambic title for a non-metered poem. 

Wonderful, self-fulfilling poem. Tender beyond the sum of its words.
Paul

I debated which to use; they both had there pluses and minuses.
"Again" gives it weight because it's happened before.
Leaving it out gives it weight because it's (maybe) a special instance.
I ended up using the latter because I decided I liked the hint of singularity.
Ray

P.S. They're both iambic: One's trimeter and the other's tetrameter.

[Tiger the Lion]

For a moment I wanted the title to be "i dreamt of you again last night" - a good iambic title for a non-metered poem. 

Wonderful, self-fulfilling poem. Tender beyond the sum of its words.
Paul

I debated which to use; they both had there pluses and minuses.
"Again" gives it weight because it's happened before.
Leaving it out gives it weight because it's (maybe) a special instance.
I ended up using the latter because I decided I liked the hint of singularity.
Ray

P.S. They're both iambic: One's trimeter and the other's tetrameter.

Yes. I thought the 4 foot title might be cute.

[rayheinrich]

For a moment I wanted the title to be "i dreamt of you again last night" - a good iambic title for a non-metered poem. 

Wonderful, self-fulfilling poem. Tender beyond the sum of its words.
Paul

I debated which to use; they both had there pluses and minuses.
"Again" gives it weight because it's happened before.
Leaving it out gives it weight because it's (maybe) a special instance.
I ended up using the latter because I decided I liked the hint of singularity.
Ray

P.S. They're both iambic: One's trimeter and the other's tetrameter.

Yes. I thought the 4 foot title might be cute.

Oh, yes, damn, didn't get that "four-footed" implication. You so cool.