A limerick for brownlie edit0.0001 Dr. milo

[tectak]

A bugler from South Carolina
played blues from her pink, pursed vagina.
One night in Ohio
she got kinda dry'o,
so she key changed majora to minor.

Oh gawd. Sewer me, someone.
tectak

[Brownlie]

Well I think you gain points for lewdness in a limerick. This one, however, is somewhat confusing at first glance. 

A bugler from South Carolina -- Of course, the bugle always has a phallic connotation.
played blues from her pink, pursed vagina. -- Well the organ is often described as a mouth, and purses are generally a feminine accoutrement so that was a good description there.
One night night in Ohio -- Not sure what you mean by night night unless you meant it as a way of saying good night. If that's the case, I'm still confused unless we are talking about a lady of the night or a free spirit.
she got kinda dry'o -- I think you are either missing a syllable here, or you have one too many in the last line.
and her majoris shrank to a minor. -- Not sure if minor rhymes. You could probably write Caroliner and vaginer above. Also, I'm confused about what majoris may mean unless you just mean major. 


Oh gawd. Sewer me, someone.
tectak

Metrically, I think there is some variability with the limericks, and I think the important thing to preserve is the rhyming, the shorter middle and the large amount of anapests. Weird double meanings and crassness also seem to go along with the genre and demonstrate that you are fully utilizing the form (in my opinion). My conclusion here is that pursed, vagina definitely belongs in a limerick. I'm not so sure about "majoris," "night night," or "dry'o" though. Of course, I may be missing something. 

Thanks for posting.

[milo]

Well I think you gain points for lewdness in a limerick. This one, however, is somewhat confusing at first glance. 

A bugler from South Carolina -- Of course, the bugle always has a phallic connotation.
played blues from her pink, pursed vagina. -- Well the organ is often described as a mouth, and purses are generally a feminine accoutrement so that was a good description there.
One night night in Ohio -- Not sure what you mean by night night unless you meant it as a way of saying good night. If that's the case, I'm still confused unless we are talking about a lady of the night or a free spirit.
she got kinda dry'o -- I think you are either missing a syllable here, or you have one too many in the last line.
and her majoris shrank to a minor. -- Not sure if minor rhymes. You could probably write Caroliner and vaginer above. Also, I'm confused about what majoris may mean unless you just mean major. 


Oh gawd. Sewer me, someone.
tectak

Metrically, I think there is some variability with the limericks, and I think the important thing to preserve is the rhyming, the shorter middle and the large amount of anapests. Weird double meanings and crassness also seem to go along with the genre and demonstrate that you are fully utilizing the form (in my opinion). My conclusion here is that pursed, vagina definitely belongs in a limerick. I'm not so sure about "majoris," "night night," or "dry'o" though. Of course, I may be missing something. 

Thanks for posting.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Labia_majora

There is a metric problem with the last line

(and limericks should be tight)
((wow, i really did go there))

actually, depends on your pronunciation of majoris, i had assumed the stresses to be the same as majora (as i assumed that is what you meant) but an online pronunciation guide lists it as MAjoris which means it works but doesn't make sense anymore . . .

[tectak]

Well I think you gain points for lewdness in a limerick. This one, however, is somewhat confusing at first glance. 

A bugler from South Carolina -- Of course, the bugle always has a phallic connotation.
played blues from her pink, pursed vagina. -- Well the organ is often described as a mouth, and purses are generally a feminine accoutrement so that was a good description there.
One night night in Ohio -- Not sure what you mean by night night unless you meant it as a way of saying good night. If that's the case, I'm still confused unless we are talking about a lady of the night or a free spirit.
she got kinda dry'o -- I think you are either missing a syllable here, or you have one too many in the last line.
and her majoris shrank to a minor. -- Not sure if minor rhymes. You could probably write Caroliner and vaginer above. Also, I'm confused about what majoris may mean unless you just mean major. 


Oh gawd. Sewer me, someone.
tectak

Hi brownIe,
copied whilst tired and did not spot Paris in the the Spring. Twice nightly gone.
Sacrificed anatomical correctness for musicality but am alright now.
Best,
tectak

Metrically, I think there is some variability with the limericks, and I think the important thing to preserve is the rhyming, the shorter middle and the large amount of anapests. Weird double meanings and crassness also seem to go along with the genre and demonstrate that you are fully utilizing the form (in my opinion). My conclusion here is that pursed, vagina definitely belongs in a limerick. I'm not so sure about "majoris," "night night," or "dry'o" though. Of course, I may be missing something. 

Thanks for posting.

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Well I think you gain points for lewdness in a limerick. This one, however, is somewhat confusing at first glance. 

A bugler from South Carolina -- Of course, the bugle always has a phallic connotation.
played blues from her pink, pursed vagina. -- Well the organ is often described as a mouth, and purses are generally a feminine accoutrement so that was a good description there.
One night night in Ohio -- Not sure what you mean by night night unless you meant it as a way of saying good night. If that's the case, I'm still confused unless we are talking about a lady of the night or a free spirit.
she got kinda dry'o -- I think you are either missing a syllable here, or you have one too many in the last line.
and her majoris shrank to a minor. -- Not sure if minor rhymes. You could probably write Caroliner and vaginer above. Also, I'm confused about what majoris may mean unless you just mean major. 


Oh gawd. Sewer me, someone.
tectak

Metrically, I think there is some variability with the limericks, and I think the important thing to preserve is the rhyming, the shorter middle and the large amount of anapests. Weird double meanings and crassness also seem to go along with the genre and demonstrate that you are fully utilizing the form (in my opinion). My conclusion here is that pursed, vagina definitely belongs in a limerick. I'm not so sure about "majoris," "night night," or "dry'o" though. Of course, I may be missing something. 

Thanks for posting.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Labia_majora

There is a metric problem with the last line

(and limericks should be tight)
((wow, i really did go there))

actually, depends on your pronunciation of majoris, i had assumed the stresses to be the same as majora (as i assumed that is what you meant) but an online pronunciation guide lists it as MAjoris which means it works but doesn't make sense anymore . . .

Nonsense
Vaginas are funny,
tits are too.
I like a good laugh;
How about you?

Corrected.
tectak

[Mark A Becker]

Wow Tom,

I never thought I'd see such serious commentary on a limerick.

I do wonder what the "night, night" is about, because it reads like an unintentional repeat repeat.

I don't mind the slant rhymes at all, and I'm a fan of rhymes like "idea" and "cheer" or "horse" and "waltz".

Also unsure of "majoris" because it makes me think of a constellation. But, I do get the major key reference...

That's 'bout it..
... Mark

[tectak]

Wow Tom,

I never thought I'd see such serious commentary on a limerick.  

I do wonder what the "night, night" is about, because it reads like an unintentional repeat repeat.

I don't mind the slant rhymes at all, and I'm a fan of rhymes like "idea" and "cheer" or "horse" and "waltz".

Also unsure of "majoris" because it makes me think of a constellation.  But, I do get the major key reference...

That's 'bout it..
... Mark

Correct and corrected.
Best,
tectak

[Alkalinehero]

This is a great limerick for its lewdness and metaphor

[tectak]

This is a great limerick for its lewdness and metaphor

Wot metaphor?
Best,
tectak