My Song
#1
My Song

Welcoming your presence
I resonate with your words
a sweet melody holds you
reaching, touching, soothing
my inner depths

Perhaps cliche again but it's getting me started.
You give to the world when you're giving your best to somebody else.
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#2
a good starter poem, well done kath Wink

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#3
The penultimate line was very clever; I like how you structured the poem so that those three verbs would appear alongside each other. It is cliche, but that's a good thing, I think; it plays on the most familiar parts of our imaginations, creating a warm and happy song.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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