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Cur

Where am I?

Help me. I am tired. I am a failure. I am distressed.

Where am I?

Every step I take, where am I?

There was the buttered nose,
the slammed-shut door,
the empty bowl--
I'm just hungry.

Where am I?

I'm quiet and outside of my territory.
I lost my collar on a stickerbush that 
I mistook for safe.
It choked me, then it let me go, and it's gone now.

And I'm afraid. I'm unconfident. I don't like being just me on my own. It feels like I'm about to be attacked.

So I hide, unhappy, worried. I am a failure. I am ashamed. I want to be in my territory again. I don't like it here.

Cut why?
Lost why?

And maybe now,
I'll run and run and run
until I die.

[author's note: this is just an experiment. I'm wanting to see if I could get a certain effect with a certain styling--hope that's not inappropriate.)
A yak is normal.
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If anyone sees a way to enhance the emotional or narrative quality via a rewrite, feel free!
A yak is normal.
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