Texting love
#1
(10-21-2014, 08:26 AM)HelloStranger Wrote:  -"hey"
-"hey"
Thats how we started,
-"Please stay..."
Now we are departed.



I hope you take this only in jest, but I couldn't help thinking about that one poem--you know--that one poem that appears in, like, so many different bathroom stalls while reading this:

"Here I sit
all broken-hearted

"

I think you can fill in the blanks.

Don't get me wrong, I don't feel that way about this poem.
For me, this poetry didn't really work. It's all tell and no show. Needs more imagery and such.
#2
yo ho ho,
wadda ya know
give some feedback
or off you'll go/

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(10-21-2014, 08:26 AM)HelloStranger Wrote:  -"hey"
-"hey"
Thats how we started,
-"Please stay..."
Now we are departed.




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