Whirling Dervish

[Erthona]

Whirling Dervish


You were deconstructed
on the page before you died,
what exactly killed you
no one ever could decide.
They formed an academic
council, as they often had before,
but then decided to give it up
it was to much like a chore.
For although creation is
fairly easy to define,
deconstruction like destruction
leaves a void in the mind.
Still in the end it doesn’t matter,
because what has ever mattered most,
as it occupies post modernist,
while they spin upon their post.

–Erthona

©2014

[faithlovedance22]

I would put a comma after deconstruction even though it would break up that line. Also, second to last line has a typo I believe (if it's not then something needs to be changed)

[Erthona]

faithlovedance22,

Thanks for your comments. I'm not finding a typo, could you be more specific. Unless you are thinking "is" should be "as", but "is" is correct...I think. I will think upon the comma.

Thanks again, and welcome to the site.

Dale

[Mwaba don]

Nice poem. It has nice a well presented pattern and has good rhythm. I think you conveyed the meaning quit well.
Your combination of words is very good. I liked your poem

[Erthona]

Thanks Mwaba don.

dale

[Truerenigma]

This is a wiki-surfer rhetorical poem with an arbitrary center which is not a center from which the speaker clearly expresses reactionary political designs on the reader from a strong (by strong I mean likely to be proven wrong--much like this comment) empirical position,  while simultaneously expressing the speaker's subconscious confusion about the deployment of sexuality and alliance and the infant anal stage.

Nice play on words with post. incidentally the world turns upside down but then we know it is round so it's kinda hard to flip so it just rolls along . . .

[billy]

nice post spinning

[Erthona]

TE, exactly.

dale
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Billy, Thanks,

dale