In Reverence

[Mwaba don]

In question, is it madness that I call you a lie?
in reverence of all that is written of you
in expressions rooted around the joys of youth
stretching forth to the esteems of sacrificed lives?

Possessed souls, by you, drawing meaning from anything with form
be it a stone, a flower or a twisted thread bracelet
that a woman can speak charm of it and put a man
possessed by you on urge of subjective duty or pursuit of subjective want.

That a man would speak sweet on his mouth
as if you go forth before the words of his mouth
in wholeness desire to cause not dissension but
in wholeness desire to cover up all dishonest acts.

spoken or written in language
covering the web of expression edge to edge
spoken or written conveying a great extent of meanings,
So extraordinary indeed!

But Wait!
how wonderful that this is so
hope is born after the stillness in sorrow
sadness flees from the joys of melodic song

That in question, it is madness to call you a lie?
in reverence of all that is written of you
in expressions rooted around the joys of youth
stretching forth to the esteems of sacrificed lives.

possessed souls, by you, draw meaning from anything with form
be it a stone, a flower or a twisted thread bracelet
that a woman can speak charm of it and put a man
possessed by you, on urge of subjective duty or pursuit of subjective want.

Spoken or written in language
covering the web of expression edge to edge
spoken or written conveying a great extent of meanings.

That a man would speak sweet on his mouth
as if you go forth before the words of his mouth
in wholeness desire to cause not dissension but
in wholeness desire to cover up all dishonest acts
So extraordinary indeed!

[Starbeam]

This is powerfully written but I do not know of what you speak. There is a lot of repetition. Is this a song?

[cidermaid]

Hello Mwaba,  I'm afraid that I could not really find anything in here to take hold of and work with concerning what this was about.  This disconnect with the subject was then not helped by the double spaced lines that made it difficult and distracting to read. Hence why i closed up the lines to do this reply.
  My advise would be to focus on what you want to convey and then also to work on eliminating some of the repititions.
Try and ground your subject so that the reader can plug into who or what this is about.  (my nearest guess was that it was about spiritual things / religion...but i would be hard pressed to say which one).  
If you choose to edit this one try and give us some images and solid ideas and musch less airy fairy abstracts with no real meaning and also try to add a bit more punctuation to guide the reader through.

All the best AJ.

In question, is it madness that I call you a lie?
In reverence of all that is written of you
In expressions rooted around the joys of youth
Stretching forth to the esteems of sacrificed lives?

Possessed souls, by you, drawing meaning from anything with form
Be it a stone, a flower or a twisted thread bracelet
That a woman can speak charm of it and put a man
Possessed by you on urge of subjective duty or pursuit of subjective want.

That a man would speak sweet on his mouth
As if you go forth before the words of his mouth
In wholeness desire to cause not dissension but
In wholeness desire to cover up all dishonest acts.

Spoken or written in language
Covering the web of expression edge to edge
Spoken or written conveying a great extent of meanings,
So extraordinary indeed!

But Wait!
How wonderful that this is so
Hope is born after the stillness in sorrow
Sadness flees from the joys of melodic song

That in question, it is madness to call you a lie?
In reverence of all that is written of you
In expressions rooted around the joys of youth
Stretching forth to the esteems of sacrificed lives.

Possessed souls, by you, draw meaning from anything with form
Be it a stone, a flower or a twisted thread bracelet
That a woman can speak charm of it and put a man
Possessed by you, on urge of subjective duty or pursuit of subjective want

Spoken or written in language
Covering the web of expression edge to edge
Spoken or written conveying a great extent of meanings.

That a man would speak sweet on his mouth
As if you go forth before the words of his mouth
In wholeness desire to cause not dissension but
In wholeness desire to cover up all dishonest acts

So extraordinary indeed!

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