Charcoal on Napkin
#1
Charcoal on Napkin

Happy Day Sweetheart!
I wanted to write you a pretty poem,
but I know how you hate that sparkly shit,
first thing in the morning.
(You say it hurts your eyes).
So I stopped myself.
See?
I do listen.
Just wanted to say I love you –
sorry for repeating myself –
see you tonight.
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#2
What I really liked about this is - there are no plums!

From the title, I was imagining someone had burned their baby and left a confession. But it's nothing like that. Light hearted and cute - or a bit obsessive?
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#3
love is... charcoal on napkins
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#4
Ha ha, amusing my friend. I know this is for fun, but shouldn't that be graphite on a napkin?
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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#5
Thank you guys for reading. This was a bit of an experiment. I wanted this to sound like a poet who is sure of his message, but feels on shaky ground with his intended audience. I have a friend that always says "can't you just say one thing in plain English?"
It's hard, but I try.
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