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For fun.
Gardening
If you've got the thumbs for gardening,
root up on a hill of skulls.
Don't you know there are weeds in Eden,
charcoaled words,
obese worms
and a rag trade?
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Paul,
hill of skulls=Golgotha
obese worm=serpent in the garden of Eden
rag trade=clothes worn by Adam and Eve after they ate of the fruit and became aware of their nakedness.
charcoaled words=the serpent's "oily" words of temptation.
thumbs for gardening+green thumbs, ability to make tings grow.
So Christ had to die on Golgotha (the eyes of the skull are suppose to be the entrance to hell), to overturn the original sin, break the chains of death in hell, and bring about salvation. All things known to most "Christians"* as it is a core belief of Christianity. So why go out of your way to make something obscure that is already well known?
Am I missing something?
Dale
*there are those who spout the dogma, but fail to follow Christ's example in terms of living, in fact, much more of the first and few of the latter.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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The pop and sweet of first corn,
the red rush that reminds
me what a tomato really tastes
like, red stained hands and that hint of loam
in the beet salad. Winter's make-believe
fades in July, each bite a grin.
Sorry, couldn't resist, just a simple girl, yanno.
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Dale, I didn't really go out of my way. I was reading the last page of "On the Road" for the 200th time and I always loved the line where Kerouac says "Don't you know that God is Pooh Bear?". Anyway, I wanted a Christian to ask a Jew a question, and this is what came out. You did score 5 of 6 though on your analysis. Haha. Really was just for fun, but the reminder for clarity is always welcome.
Marcella, I like your reply much better than my 6 line experiment.

The first line especially was just graphic enough that I need to go buy corn now. God knows, I can't grow it.
Paul
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Paul,
Not very nice to tell me I got five out of six and not tell me which one I missed
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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(07-05-2014, 07:17 AM)Erthona Wrote: Paul,
Not very nice to tell me I got five out of six and not tell me which one I missed 
Dale
Haha, sorry Dale. It is the Middle East, after all. So many corpses, so few worms.