Anapestic meter?

[QDeathstar]

The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke.

As the dew left a milky wet coat
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget
The mistakes they mistook for passion.

[milo]

The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke.

As the dew left a milky wet coat
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget
The mistakes they mistook for passion.

nope

[Brownlie]

The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke.

As the dew left a milky wet coat
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget
The mistakes they mistook for passion.

Maybe try a limerick. Check out a webpage with the form outlined and read some examples. Good Luck.

[QDeathstar]

The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke.

As the dew left a milky wet coat
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget
The mistakes they mistook for passion.

nope

*shakes fist*. Darn.


Could you all give me the best line of anapestic meter, and the line that is most off?

[ellajam]

Hi, Q, first a disclaimer: I am just learning meter myself and and my untrained ear can sometimes twist something into working that is actually wrong. That said, an anapest is da da DUM. I've starred lines that sound correct to me, the rest I'm pretty sure is off. Just don't use me as a source in an argument.

The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke. *maybe, both is a problem

As the dew left a milky wet coat *This sounds right to me.
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget *again, both is iffy for me
The mistakes they mistook for passion.

[abu nuwas]

Q,

You can do this yourself. Try and force the words into de de DA:

the midDEL/of the NIGHT/was silENT

Do you see? There are some where it is not so obvious. Ella worries about 'both' because it is strongish, for a weak stress, but could go, depending on how it was read --but remember, you can have forced stress just like forced rhyme. 'Both' can be either strong or weak, depending on the words around. If you say it and it sounds silly as de de DA, it is wrong.

in the COOL/of the NIGHT/ q wrote THIS
as he WENT/to the BOG/for a PISS

that kind of thing. Someone suggested trying it with limericks --there! I've started you off!

[Leanne]

Ed is right and it's just not correct
but I'm glad that you've tried to connect
all the dots in this game that we play
though it's wrong it's all right anyway

You must fix da da DUM in your head
tap it out then put words in instead
let the beat be your guide as you write
till it keeps you awake every night

[abu nuwas]

Ed is right and it's just not correct
but I'm glad that you've tried to connect
all the dots in this game that we play
though it's wrong it's all right anyway

You must fix da da DUM in your head
tap it out then put words in instead
let the beat be your guide as you write
till it keeps you awake every night

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