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Tam, Tam, where are ye,
Tam, Tam, where hav’ ye been,
I hope yer nae down in yer bottle,
trying to wash away yer sins, yer sins,
trying to wash away yer sins.
Nae, nae good fellow,
I’m not in the bottle a ‘tall
I’m here hav’en a good smoke
restin’ ‘gainst this sturdy rock wall,
restin’ ‘gainst this wall.
Tam, Tam, good fellow,
have ye seen a lassie so fine,
if ‘en ye do keep yer hands off ’er
cause that lassie so pretty is mine, is mine
cause that lassie so pretty is mine,.
Ah good fellow I seen ‘er
Hair like gold and skin brightly tan,
but make no claims good fellow,
for I saw nae gold on her hand, her hand,
For I saw nae gold on her hand.
©2014
–Erthona
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nice one Dale, love the way the Scottish talk- or the Irish. Liked the repetitions made it very musical.
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In poems like this, is it good form to separate the dialogue with a name prefacing the stanzas? I.E.,
"Tam, Tam, where are ye,
Tam, Tam, where hav’ ye been,
I hope yer nae down in yer bottle,
trying to wash away yer sins, yer sins,
trying to wash away yer sins.
Tam:
Nae, nae good fellow,
I’m not in the bottle a ‘tall
I’m here hav’en a good smoke
restin’ ‘gainst this sturdy rock wall,
restin’ ‘gainst this wall."
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line
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Mary,
Thanks, I'm not good at writing dialogue, especial Scottish as this is suppose to be. It is simply a bit of a spoof on Tom, who while he has been touring Scotland will often sign his name as Tam, which of course is how they would pronounce "Tom" in the land o' Nessie.
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You are right of course, but I'm a terrible one for good form, if there's an authoritarian rock I will rebel against it (Captain Hooks the fellow for you), and in this instance I thought it was fairly obvious who was talking and choose to ignore putting names on it, especially as only one person has a name, and putting "other guy" just seemed a bit odd. Blame the Stream of Consciousness writers."  Well I'm off to the lighthouse so I can pierce this heart of darkness (I can't understand a word of what Brando says, it very frustrating!)
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(04-21-2014, 10:30 PM)Erthona Wrote: .
Tam, Tam, where are ye, whurr arr ye
Tam, Tam, where hav’ ye been, whurr haive yi' binn
I hope yer nae down in yer bottle, Ah hope yer nae doon in yer boatlle
trying to wash away yer sins, yer sins, tryin tee wahsh awah year sins
trying to wash away yer sins.
Nae, nae good fellow, Naw,naw guid fella
I’m not in the bottle a ‘tall Ahm no,in the boattle atah
I’m here hav’en a good smoke Ahm hierr havin a braw smoke
restin’ ‘gainst this sturdy rock wall,
restin’ ‘gainst this wall.
Tam, Tam, good fellow,
have ye seen a lassie so fine,
if ‘en ye do keep yer hands off ’er if ye de, keep yer hawnds affer
cause that lassie so pretty is mine, is mine
cause that lassie so pretty is mine,.
etc
Ah good fellow I seen ‘er
Hair like gold and skin brightly tan,
but make no claims good fellow,mack
for I saw nae gold on her hand, her hand,
For I saw nae gold on her hand.
©2014
–Erthona
...but apart from that, quite acceptably Welsh 
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It's a hoot mon  I like your little highland fling and ode to Tam, it sings Scottish to me, but I am not much with a brogue.
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Owl! Thanks Chris - by the by, I would be liking to see more of yer watercolors and less of yer cat.
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Thanks Tom fer correctin me worden, I should have remembered "guid" as it rhymes with "Bluid"
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"Why dois your brand sae drap wi bluid"
But it canna' be Welsh, as there's nae mention of pretty sheep ta be a courtin'!
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"Argo is a watercolor (I painted him twice)"
I bet he enjoyed that!
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