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The Dancing Squirrel

The Dancing Squirrel
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03-22-2014, 08:22 AM
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04-11-2014, 08:26 PM
I hope this is not your poem. What happened to the dancing rodent?
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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04-11-2014, 08:50 PM
clothesline
squirrel
tightrope
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04-11-2014, 08:57 PM
(04-11-2014, 08:50 PM)ellajam Wrote:  clothesline
squirrel
tightrope


Ha ha...

Dancing Squirrel

hot-pepper suet
silicon-sprayed feeder
famished squirrel
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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04-11-2014, 09:08 PM
(04-11-2014, 08:57 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  
(04-11-2014, 08:50 PM)ellajam Wrote:  clothesline
squirrel
tightrope


Ha ha...

Dancing Squirrel

hot-pepper suet
silicon-sprayed feeder
famished squirrel

ha, the suet hangs from the middle of the clothesline, I'll have to try adding hot pepper, silicon won't work for bears, has to be high up. Smile
billy wrote:welcome to the site. make it your own, wear it like a well loved slipper and wear it out. ella pleads:please click forum titles for posting guidelines, important threads. New poet? Try Poetic DevicesandWard's Tips

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04-11-2014, 10:18 PM
(04-11-2014, 09:08 PM)ellajam Wrote:  
(04-11-2014, 08:57 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  
(04-11-2014, 08:50 PM)ellajam Wrote:  clothesline
squirrel
tightrope


Ha ha...

Dancing Squirrel

hot-pepper suet
silicon-sprayed feeder
famished squirrel

ha, the suet hangs from the middle of the clothesline, I'll have to try adding hot pepper, silicon won't work for bears, has to be high up. Smile

You can buy it ready made. I'll IM you my source./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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04-11-2014, 10:30 PM
I appears the dancing squirrel has danced away Smile

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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04-11-2014, 10:32 PM
(04-11-2014, 10:30 PM)Erthona Wrote:  I appears the dancing squirrel has danced away Smile

Dale

Bandalooped right out of sight.
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04-11-2014, 10:36 PM
(04-11-2014, 09:08 PM)ellajam Wrote:  
(04-11-2014, 08:57 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  
(04-11-2014, 08:50 PM)ellajam Wrote:  clothesline
squirrel
tightrope


Ha ha...

Dancing Squirrel

hot-pepper suet
silicon-sprayed feeder
famished squirrel

ha, the suet hangs from the middle of the clothesline, I'll have to try adding hot pepper, silicon won't work for bears, has to be high up. Smile

Silicon works best for filling in woodpecker holes in structural timber...the bounce is worth watching!
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04-11-2014, 10:40 PM
Do you mean clear silicon?
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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04-11-2014, 11:08 PM
(04-11-2014, 08:50 PM)ellajam Wrote:  clothesline
squirrel
tightrope
That was a good laugh.
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04-12-2014, 06:15 AM
(04-11-2014, 10:40 PM)Erthona Wrote:  Do you mean clear silicon?

Brown...and there is a very good reason for that. I haven't any clear.
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