Cuckoo Haiku 2

[tectak]

Cuckoo Haiku 2

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
Same leaves grow each year.

[ChristopherSea]

Cuckoo Haiku 2

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
Same leaves grow each year.

Contempt you have
for exploding leaves
and contending dales

[tectak]

Cuckoo Haiku 2

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
Same leaves grow each year.

Contempt you have
for exploding leaves
and contending dales

I am sure I do not know what you mean
Best,
Tom

[ChristopherSea]

B-b-bison Breath!

[rayheinrich]

Cuckoo Haiku 2

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
same leaves grow each year.

Contempt you have
for exploding leaves
and contending dales

I am sure I do not know what you mean
Best,
Tom

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
the same leaves grow each year

and fall in fall
a fearful sight these heady hills
eroded down to desolate, dismal dales

[ChristopherSea]

Hello I am new to these forums and i am looking for some constructive criticisms on one of my first Haiku's:

The air is empty
the motorway congested
who recalls the bee

what do you think?

Crabboy, you should post your poem as a new thread in this forum for proper attention.

[tectak]

Cuckoo Haiku 2

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
Same leaves grow each year.

nice haiku, I'd drop the periods and capitals, they break the 'one breath' flow.

I KNOW you would I took two breaths!
Best,
tectak.

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Contempt you have
for exploding leaves
and contending dales

I am sure I do not know what you mean
Best,
Tom

Contend you not with
buds that burst anew in Spring.
the same leaves grow each year

and fall in fall
a fearful sight these heady hills
eroded down to desolate, dismal dales

Are we talking lingua in maxilla here? I was.
Best,
tectak