There used to be violence.
Light green that came out, to his eyes,
instead of blood.
He would hit a child,
a woman, easy.
But what he liked best was to fight men.
That was another health,
a green juice, he could take anyone
and he could take any pain,
except for emotional;
so they broke him down with wine and women.
The women left each time, then they locked him up
without wine, where the women could not
be touched and everyone, no matter sex,
bled white, powdery stuff.
The last few nights he remembered the light
in the hospital kitchen, how it glowed different;
it must have been the drugs.
Those were the most peaceful nights, the last night,
it wasn't a blur at all.
And the next day they let him out as if nothing ever happens in the world.
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Confusing. What is the significance of the color green? Alien? An acid trip? I don't get the connection between the title and the rough images. But there are lines I like the last one. I am guess the powder is cocaine but meaning is obscured. Maybe it's a dream sequence.
The specific details are literally how they are, on the surface they could just be taken for granted. But then they mean something. Alien makes sense, but I guess it depends on you and whether or not you would take alien literally. You can take all the images as just nonsense or craziness, or you can find other meanings in them, and all those things together. But there was someone who was young and had his way with people, and the world looked and felt different, and people were different, then emotionally and physically he breaks down and gets locked up somewhere and gets normalized, as people say, then let back into the world. That's the simple narrative. The images and the thing as a poem you can just have your way with it.
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(03-11-2014, 12:27 AM)rowens Wrote: The specific details are literally how they are, on the surface they could just be taken for granted. But then they mean something. Alien makes sense, but I guess it depends on you and whether or not you would take alien literally. You can take all the images as just nonsense or craziness, or you can find other meanings in them, and all those things together. But there was someone who was young and had his way with people, and the world looked and felt different, and people were different, then emotionally and physically he breaks down and gets locked up somewhere and gets normalized, as people say, then let back into the world. That's the simple narrative. The images and the thing as a poem you can just have your way with it.
Your plot explanation makes the character reminiscent of Alex in 'A Clockwork Orange'.
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The guy from that had personality though. There's none of that in the poem really. It's a blur, then it's not. But maybe the guy in the poem had lots of personality, who knows? It's not there. I guess he was young and manic.
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(03-11-2014, 01:00 AM)rowens Wrote: The guy from that had personality though. There's none of that in the poem really. It's a blur, then it's not. But maybe the guy in the poem had lots of personality, who knows? It's not there. I guess he was young and manic.
Yes, Alex was charismatic, like many serial killers. Your character is more of a drunken brute. Nonetheless, can either type of violent individual be rehabilitated or reprogramed to be harmless?
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The last chapter of the book had it appear that the character was rehabilitated. But people lots of times go back to their old ways, don't they? They get sick of being tranquilized.
