My rant about finding "the one"

[gilmored]

Happiness is measured by so many things:
flowers, chocolates, diamond rings.
What matters most
is hardly the matter,
when so many souls are climbing that ladder.

When so many souls are climbing that ladder,
what's most important is lost in the clatter.
With birds, dogs,
beauties and hogs,
some are ashamed,
while others wear clogs.

While others wear clogs,
some are ashamed.
Some stay wild,
others are tamed.
Do you understand?

Do you understand?
My rants at
hand talk of society,
and the plans, unplanned

[ellajam]

Hi, gil, even though we're in Fun, here's the critique you requested.

First, please find your spellcheck and use it. While it may be possible, IDK, for a better poet than either of us to misspell in order to bring to mind double meanings, at our level I think it would be better to use both words somehow, the reader would get it without stopping to figure out what the hell we mean.

Happiness is measured by so many things. my punctuation is by no means expert, but maybe :
flowers, chocolates, diamond rings. cliche, that maybe what you're looking for, still, it could be more interesting.
What matters most. Is hardly the matter, comma instead of period, but I still can't make sense of it
when so many souls are climbing that latter. ladder, to happiness?

when so many souls are climbing that latter. I like the repeating lines
What is important is lost in the clatter. cliche, maybe, but nice
With birds, and dogs. Not a sentence, but anyway, if you mean the clatter of birds and dogs, you could make us hear them
Beauty's, and hogs. Beauties and hogs, a turn off to me
some are ashamed, why?
while others wear clogs. ha, what? just nonsense, the repeated lines should be stellar

while others wear clogs
some are ashamed
some stay wild, others are tamed.
do you understand? I'm not a fan of questions, they have certainly been done brilliantly, but it takes skill

do you understand?
my rants at hand no need to state this
talk of society,
and the plans, unplanned I like plans, unplanned though I hope no one asks me why.

[gilmored]

thank you ellajam. I will keep your comments in mind for my revision. I have already taken your punctuation advice.