Primal (new poem, Edit 3)

[Todd]

Thank you Lance, I appreciate the response.

[Rathbone]

I like this part. It struck a chord with me:

inhaled all the air in the park,
the streets, the city;
inhaled all light from the houses,
the cars, the sun itself -

Much of what I read seemed like a stream-of-consciousness. I don't necessarily sense the "deeper point" in the poem, but then again, I am not used to these styles.

What i got out of it was a sense of spiritual awakening, or maybe even potential awakening from just a simple step outside that struck ones mind in a very deep manner for reasons even that person cannot explain.