I could die

[Keith]

Thermometer says one hundred and two,
everybody, bone and muscle kills,
vapour rub and very strong pills.
The doctors they don’t have a clue,
I heard them mention, man got flu.

I've shuffled round and coughed on you,
left tissues all around the house,
don't even try to close my mouth.
This plague I have is something new,
I heard them mention, man got flu.

My tummies off I'm on the loo,
I feel so faint my heads too hot,
two candlesticks of bright green snot.
I think I may have followed through,
I heard them mention, man got flu.

Ask a priest to tell me true,
am I in heaven or is this my hell,
maybe I should wear a bell.
I'm failing fast my lips are blue
I heard them mention, man got flu.

[Malu]

102, you're fine. 104 is life threatening, 106 is when brain death begins, and of course 113 is nearly certain of death. You got some cushion room, I'm just kidding that is indeed very detrimental. I liked how you encompassed pretty much everything that comes with the standard flu in a simple way, no crazy metaphors about living on the sun, or disgusting details of being on the loo. I also enjoyed the rhyming. Thanks for the read.

[Keith]

102, you're fine. 104 is life threatening, 106 is when brain death begins, and of course 113 is nearly certain of death. You got some cushion room, I'm just kidding that is indeed very detrimental. I liked how you encompassed pretty much everything that comes with the standard flu in a simple way, no crazy metaphors about living on the sun, or disgusting details of being on the loo. I also enjoyed the rhyming. Thanks for the read.

Thanks Malu 106 is more like me Thanks for your time and comment. TOMH