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Senryu (xx July 2013)

Senryu (xx July 2013)
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#1
08-02-2013, 12:57 PM

roars in darkness
acid fills throat
starvation
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08-02-2013, 01:25 PM (This post was last modified: 08-02-2013, 01:25 PM by billy.)
this one reminds me of the asian guy who was recently forgotten for 4 days without food or water in the usa.

it also makes me think of an old male lions on the savannah
i like it, thanks for the read.
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08-03-2013, 01:12 AM
(08-02-2013, 01:25 PM)billy Wrote:  this one reminds me of the asian guy who was recently forgotten for 4 days without food or water in the usa.

it also makes me think of an old male lions on the savannah
i like it, thanks for the read.

I'm glad to hear you like it and that it gave some different images for you. It was my intention to create a kind of.. what's that called? Ambiguity? In this poem.
Thanks a lot for commenting, billy Smile
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08-05-2013, 11:54 AM
i'm amazed at the quality of your english...it's better than mine and i was born into it Big Grin
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08-05-2013, 12:37 PM
(08-05-2013, 11:54 AM)billy Wrote:  i'm amazed at the quality of your english...it's better than mine and i was born into it Big Grin

Why thank you so much, billy. I'm actually blushing. Blush
It means a lot to me, cause I really do try my very best at this language.
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