Why do you want to be an actor?
Because .....
I have a different voice for everyone I talk to.
I have a different face for everyone I meet.
I can see both sides of every argument and I can emphasise with anyone.
I am everyone and no one.
I have strong feelings about anything.
I am completely malleable .
I am continually shaped by every person I meet.
I am an amalgamation of everything I've ever experienced.
I am a reflection.
And that's why I'm an actor.....
And I'll do anything for money.
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(07-26-2013, 01:48 PM)Wolf359pogo Wrote: Why do you want to be an actor?
Because .....
I have a different voice for everyone I talk to.
I have a different face for everyone I meet.
I can see both sides of every argument and I can emphasise with anyone.emphasis
I am no one and everyone.
I have strong feelings about everything.
I am completely malleable .
I am being continually shaped by every person I meet.
I am an amalgamation of every personality I've ever encountered.
I am a reflection of the thousands of people I've encountered so far in my life
And that's why I'm an actor.....
And I'll do anything for money.
This is more of a checklist answer to the question raised than it is a poetic expression to the question raised. I think if you could capture the answer more poetically it would be a better read. Some imagery would help greatly, for example
"I have a different voice for everyone I talk to"
"My dialect changes with the seasons"
Just an idea
I once told this blond chick to screw in a light bulb..
She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"
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I agree with R.C. Kitchens, if you add more imagery it will help a lot. I also think you could lose the first line all together. It's already the title of the poem, it makes it a little repetitive, but that's just my opinion.
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It seems like a random collection of sentences rather than a poem. I agree with the others this poem needs stanzas maybe try and rhyme a little bit! You can have so much with this topic explore and write in stanza's.
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(07-26-2013, 01:48 PM)Wolf359pogo Wrote: Why do you want to be an actor?
Because .....
I have a different voice for everyone I talk to.
I have a different face for everyone I meet.
I can see both sides of every argument and I can emphasise with anyone. (I think you mean empathise?)
I am everyone and no one.
I have strong feelings about anything.
I am completely malleable .
I am continually shaped by every person I meet.
I am an amalgamation of everything I've ever experienced.
I am a reflection.
And that's why I'm an actor.....
And I'll do anything for money.
I'd like to hear more about what this actor is feeling? I think you hint that this person has a lack of identity...maybe expand on that? I quite like the way the poem sort of bangs on about all this stuff that's sort of "deep" (or trying to be) and then it ends with this sort of straight forward (pragmatic?) "I'll do anything for money"
