The knight of light

[jdguyb]

His hands are light
Filled with the justice of the true
His sword is a beacon of emotion
Empathy, Joy, and hate for the Dark knight
He knows his enemies power
He knows he must fight
He knows he must win
To save all creation
His bride is beautiful
A fair maiden
Her magic sustains him
His magic sword glows an eerie light
Made to confuse his enemies
His magic sustains his bride
They sweetly make love
And hope to bear a child
If the prophecy is fulfilled
It will be a child of utmost light
Capable of crushing the darkness

[rowens]

Maybe you should turn this into a short story, and add more details. It seems like a summary.

[Volaticus]

His hands are light
Filled with the justice of the true
His sword is a beacon of emotion
Empathy, Joy, and hate for the Dark knight
He knows his enemies power
He knows he must fight
He knows he must win
To save all creation
His bride is beautiful
A fair maiden
Her magic sustains him
His magic sword glows an eerie light
Made to confuse his enemies
His magic sustains his bride
They sweetly make love
And hope to bear a child
If the prophecy is fulfilled
It will be a child of utmost light
Capable of crushing the darkness

Hi,
I must agree with rowens; it reads like a summary, more than a poem.
And there's a few too many cliches. L5-L10 for instance, are lines that have been said many times before. You could try to experiment with saying things in a different way, trying different words and combinations and see what works for you. You could try to paint more of a picture, instead of directly telling what happens.
Of course, this is JMHO, to be used or binned at will.
Best,
LB