new years, spring, summer, fall, winter photographs

[rayheinrich]

new years, spring, summer, fall, winter photographs
you jumping into
(sound of water)

and:

old pound
spring jumps in
(sound of frogs)

[Brownlie]

new years, spring, summer, fall, winter photographs
you jumping into
(sound of water)

and:

old pound
spring jumps in
(sound of frogs)


With the first one you have a medley of seasons grouped together in a sort of hodge-podge. The second one has a juxtaposition of old and new which I like. Spring is inevitably tied with both death and creation. (Or some sort of theme like that).

[rayheinrich]

With the first one you have a medley of seasons grouped together in a sort of hodge-podge.

Hodge-podge? It ain't no hodge-podge, they're in the correct order.

The second one has a juxtaposition of old and new which I like. Spring is inevitably tied to both death and creation...

And don't forget the Qingming Festival (Tomb Sweeping Day) on the
15th day after the Spring Equinox. The tradition is to celebrate the
new spring and to tend to the graves of ancestors.

See: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Qingming_Festival
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[Brownlie]

With the first one you have a medley of seasons grouped together in a sort of hodge-podge.

Hodge-podge? It ain't no hodge-podge, they're in the correct order.

The second one has a juxtaposition of old and new which I like. Spring is inevitably tied to both death and creation...

And don't forget the Qingming Festival (Tomb Sweeping Day) on the
15th day after the Spring Equinox. The tradition is to celebrate the
new spring and to tend to the graves of ancestors.

See: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Qingming_Festival
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I'm not sure a Haiku is meant to encompass all the seasons. I think that the first line of a haiku is traditionally a seasonal reference. Because you have listed all the seasons it seemed like a hodge-podge which isn't necessarily a critique. A euphemism such as the word "Fusion" may have served my intentions more clearly. Just being facetious with you.

[rayheinrich]

I'm not sure a Haiku is meant to encompass all the seasons. I think that the first line of a haiku is traditionally a seasonal reference. Because you have listed all the seasons it seemed like a hodge-podge which isn't necessarily a critique. A euphemism such as the word "Fusion" may have served my intentions more clearly. Just being facetious with you.

As I you.

And yes, only one kigo is allowed in a haiku. But since there are
more than 9000 of them (maybe more, it's hard to figure out), it's
a real pain in the ass to figure out if you've used only one

[billy]

new years, spring, summer, fall, winter photographs
you jumping into
(sound of water)

and:

old pound
spring jumps in
(sound of frogs)

i think the line between form and experimental has been drawn in the sand by ray in this one.

fantastic write ray it's extremely well done and very very clever how you explain it's birth.
unless it a senryu then, i'd have to say;

i think the line between form and experimental has been drawn in the sand by ray in this one.

fantastic write ray it's extremely well done and very very clever how you explain it's birth.

unless it's a senryu and at the same time a haiku, in which case i say;

i think the line between form and experimental has been drawn in the sand by ray in this one.

fantastic write ray it's extremely well done and very very clever how you explain it's birth.