On Warnings.

[Bunx]

warning i don't want to post this.
in an artistic way. but this site,
means more than i speak.

you got words. spit them out,
log them up; then pull them out.

capital mistakes, with warnings you
can be cut off. writing is a
privilege, no leverage; no remorse.

so i write this with a feeling, no nonsense.
i write this with a feeling of pretense, address
the warnings, with no mourning rising up with the sun.

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me taking a powder shat

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warning i don't want to post this.
in an artistist way. but this site,
meant more than i say.

you got words. spit them out,
log them up; then pull them out.

capital mistakes, with warnings you
can be cut off. this is a writing is a
privilege, no leverage; no remorse.

so i write this with a feeling, no nonsense.
i write this with a feeling of pretense, address
the warnings, with no mourning this morning.

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me taking a powder shat

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adding picture so hard ><

[allykat727]

warning i don't want to post this.
in an artistist way. but this site, artistist? have a feeling you meant 'artistic'?
meant more than i say. perhaps change this to 'means' to keep your verb tense consistent?

you got words. spit them out,
log them up; then pull them out. Catchy and rhythmic!!

capital mistakes, with warnings you
can be cut off. this is a writing is a Typo? Did you mean 'this writing is a'? ... confused...
privilege, no leverage; no remorse.

so i write this with a feeling, no nonsense.
i write this with a feeling of pretense, address
the warnings, with no mourning this morning. I think the 'mourning' 'morning' play on words is kind of cliche

I like what this piece is trying to say and its good advice Thanks for the read!

[Bunx]

thanks alleykitty, i found that it sucks when you hurt peoples feeling on their site. this is my apology