Let's just pretend we never met
#1
I'm in a wine-dark mood

(but I like wine )

(Blues, slightly funkified)

Let's just pretend we never met

before

and never will again

and it gets even better:

we do not even know

that we exist.

Existence is a fleeting bird

just as much as love is, too.

And so I sit

um pouco sozinho,

a little lonesome,

getting tenderly drunk on:

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Os meus pais nas minhas costas
As raizes na marquise
Eu tenho mais de vinte muros
O sangue jorra pelos furos
Pelas veias de um jornal
Eu não te quero, eu te quero mal *

drunk on the lyrics

of a Brazilian Blues.

Just as much as love is

just as well

a colibri, a butterfly

swinging on the waves

of sadly hungover days

of waste and wine and

self-inflicted pain.

Just as much as it is true

that the poet inside of my heart

appreciates sailin, drowing and swimming through

- quote Homer -

o oinops pontos,

the wine(-dark) sea

gliding happily

happy with William Butterflyin high Yay!

Tsk tsk!

To Byzantion as if

I had my

- oh so ever unexpectedly and very surprisingly -

second (of) cuming.

Fits me awfully perfectly well anyway

cuz

I urgently need a

sabbatical

from my heterosexual

fooleries anyway

and wanted to

read Gemistos Plethon kai Marsilio Ficino

for such a long time.

Γεώργιος Γεμιστός ή Πλήθων**

Because he brought (Neo-) Platonism *** back into

the philosophical play

of Renaissance Europe

and

Il Signore M. Ficino

jumped on Plethon's shoulders

considering the latter a giant

to boost his opere filosofiche.

* 20 anos Blues letra

** http://www.rassias.gr/SPARTA33.html

*** http://ellas2.wordpress.com/2011/01/25/%...%BF%CF%85/

****http://www.ficino.it
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#2
just sayin'
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#3
(06-06-2013, 01:22 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  just sayin'

Hi serge,
I have not commented on your stuff recently. You seem to be going through a phase.
This is a problem for me. The greatest virtue of your recent (and not so recentSmile) efforts is also the greatest failing...you have started to write with complete self indulgency. This is so evident that even the "form" of this piece is screaming out "leave me alone"! In other words, because you are writing veracity verse, it is what it is and cannot be critiqued on any of the platforms which we stand on.
I will, therefore, just say this. You could put it better....but no critic could.
Best,
tectak
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#4
(06-06-2013, 03:53 PM)tectak Wrote:  
(06-06-2013, 01:22 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  just sayin'

Hi serge,
I have not commented on your stuff recently. You seem to be going through a phase.
This is a problem for me. The greatest virtue of your recent (and not so recentSmile) efforts is also the greatest failing...you have started to write with complete self indulgency. This is so evident that even the "form" of this piece is screaming out "leave me alone"! In other words, because you are writing veracity verse, it is what it is and cannot be critiqued on any of the platforms which we stand on.
I will, therefore, just say this. You could put it better....but no critic could.
Best,
tectak

would you prefer me to leave?
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#5
This is fantastic. Am I in serious critique again? Cue my last thought. Woops.
I'll be there in a minute.
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#6
.... ?

(06-06-2013, 04:16 PM)newsclippings Wrote:  This is fantastic. Am I in serious critique again? Cue my last thought. Woops.


https://www.vocabulary.com/dictionary/fantastic
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#7
I meant I liked it. Though I didn't understand the Portuguese

I know I'm supposed to tell you why, but I don't post in Serious and I'm lazy.
I'll be there in a minute.
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#8
(06-06-2013, 03:58 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  
(06-06-2013, 03:53 PM)tectak Wrote:  
(06-06-2013, 01:22 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  just sayin'

Hi serge,
I have not commented on your stuff recently. You seem to be going through a phase.
This is a problem for me. The greatest virtue of your recent (and not so recentSmile) efforts is also the greatest failing...you have started to write with complete self indulgency. This is so evident that even the "form" of this piece is screaming out "leave me alone"! In other words, because you are writing veracity verse, it is what it is and cannot be critiqued on any of the platforms which we stand on.
I will, therefore, just say this. You could put it better....but no critic could.
Best,
tectak

would you prefer me to leave?

No. I would prefer you to stay...but who listens to my opinionHysterical
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#9
(06-06-2013, 06:37 PM)tectak Wrote:  
(06-06-2013, 03:58 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  
(06-06-2013, 03:53 PM)tectak Wrote:  Hi serge,
I have not commented on your stuff recently. You seem to be going through a phase.
This is a problem for me. The greatest virtue of your recent (and not so recentSmile) efforts is also the greatest failing...you have started to write with complete self indulgency. This is so evident that even the "form" of this piece is screaming out "leave me alone"! In other words, because you are writing veracity verse, it is what it is and cannot be critiqued on any of the platforms which we stand on.
I will, therefore, just say this. You could put it better....but no critic could.
Best,
tectak

would you prefer me to leave?

No. I would prefer you to stay...but who listens to my opinionHysterical


Indeed,

but:

"A father who whipped his son for swearing and swore at him while he whipped him, did more harm by his example than good by his correction."
Thomas Fuller, author and divine


Tom, um ..

Le mie scusi, ma:

Other ladies must hopefully-comfortably
cum first.
I am positive you'll understand.

And on that
( -pleased-to- ) please,
consider
it
may
be next
time I
will better fit
your bill.

serge (relatively (un-) im

-pressed)- presto
impressionato
2 pleas.

Cheers
and:

May you have a good time cuming.


Gratiam tibi,

arbiter elegantiarum aut
elegantiae.

To You, then,
Petronio!

Tu est arbiter elegentiarum saeculi saeculorumm . whastever whathefuck. My you prosper, good luck and poof!
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#10
oh well. poof! ;-)
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