Stammer

[Catcherin]

I wrote it all down on the paper,
I bled it all over the page,
Before my thoughts turned to vapour,
Before my thoughts turned to rage,
I wished to achieve nothing at all,
To obliterate every feeling I had,
My catharsis was to constantly scrawl,
Because without I would surely go mad,
Desperation is a ground for exposure,
To people I will only be a crutch,
I yearn for this sort of disclosure,
But never has paper weighed so much.

[rowens]

I think desperation is the best way to start. The commas seem more appropriate in this one.

[Glittercake]

All I have to say is wow...

[Tommy]

I wrote it all down on the paper, lose "the"
I bled it all over the page, this is when you caught my attention!
Before my thoughts turned to vapour,
Before my thoughts turned to rage,the use of thoughts again spoiled this line for me. It just needs a slight twist.
I wished to achieve nothing at all,
To obliterate every feeling I had,
My catharsis was to constantly scrawl,
Because without I would surely go mad, when I read it aloud I have trouble with the rhythm of "because without" two - two syllable words next to each other made me stumble a bit.
Desperation is a ground for exposure, I wanted to read it "grounds for exposure" but that does change the meaning.
To people I will only be a crutch,
I yearn for this sort of disclosure,
But never has paper weighed so much. nice strong ending.

I enjoyed this poem very much. Maybe because we've all been there. I offer these humble edits as suggestion only because it's pretty darn good without.

[tadaki]

I liked this poem. The last line especially makes for a good ending, and I can relate to the whole "just wanting to write it all out" feeling. I stumbled on the same line as Tommy but at a different place, "because without I..." -- I read that as "because without it I..." but otherwise I thought it flowed pretty nicely

Thanks for sharing!