sonnet for the beautiful fancy girl in a bonnet

[Obloquy]

Wrote this for my english class. Tell me where I messed up if I did because I have never written a sonnet. Thanks guys.

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Strolling through town, window shopping with gals,
Stumbling down she notices the leather.
Searching for that hand, eyes meet, and she hails
Up, she is pulled, manners she's seen never
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Upon closer inspection, she sees grime.
Ruffled hair, dirty face, just a greaser.
He must be deviantly plotting crime
Her remarks egg him into leaving her.
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The gals gossip and whisper about him.
They'd call him a sexual deviant.
He stays at home, awfully sad and grim.
The realization is immediate.
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A kind of person cannot see past looks.
Especially when she's in heart and nooks.

[rowens]

The wording is sort of awkward all the way through. Needs some kind of smoothing out.

[Magpie]

Where was the bonnet? Can I have a refund, I was misled by the title You need to be a bit tighter with those rhyming words, some of them don't really rhyme. If you read it out to yourself it's easier to hear where it might be going wrong.
Good effort though

[qwerty_H]

Interesting sonnet. Some of the rhymes don't rhyme but I don't know if they have to rhyme perfectly these days. Some of the sentences are mixed up a little bit though like

Searching for that hand, eyes meet, and she hails
Up, she is pulled, manners she's seen never

thanks.

-H