07-23-2012, 10:22 PM
Hi Aish,
Just to jump right in:
The title was certainly an attention grabber . . . and then when I was done reading, it made me feel like I understood even better after reflecting back to the title. Masterful.
Wow. This comment is evenly weighted with both my personal connection to feelings of doubt centered around my own identity and the fact that it was worded in a way that delivered the feelings and images to me without the slightest jar. I don't mean to drool, but you make me very jealous sometimes.
I Googled jabberwoky cross because it has been years since I read Carol, but I didn't really get a definitive answer. Despite my lack of understanding, the second line here is very expressive and took me on a tumble when I read it. Instead of using images, you are using animations in your poetry :p
Again, this might be less of a poetry critique and more of a philosophical discussion, but the simplicity of this line in tandem with all that has come before had me walking down trails in my mind that are less than comfortable and certainly not often used. I mean that in a good way
Thanks for sharing and sorry I don't have more technical stuff to say
Just to jump right in:
The title was certainly an attention grabber . . . and then when I was done reading, it made me feel like I understood even better after reflecting back to the title. Masterful.
Quote:Reigned in, or re-awakened,
which one fits without binding??
Wow. This comment is evenly weighted with both my personal connection to feelings of doubt centered around my own identity and the fact that it was worded in a way that delivered the feelings and images to me without the slightest jar. I don't mean to drool, but you make me very jealous sometimes.
Quote:His jabberwoky cross impales me,
splits my head, and tumbles scenes.
I Googled jabberwoky cross because it has been years since I read Carol, but I didn't really get a definitive answer. Despite my lack of understanding, the second line here is very expressive and took me on a tumble when I read it. Instead of using images, you are using animations in your poetry :p
Quote:But what?
Again, this might be less of a poetry critique and more of a philosophical discussion, but the simplicity of this line in tandem with all that has come before had me walking down trails in my mind that are less than comfortable and certainly not often used. I mean that in a good way
Thanks for sharing and sorry I don't have more technical stuff to say