Obsession Over If

[Philatone]

hey!
some thoughts for you

If the world had been expected,
she wouldn't have cried.
if time had a form,
she wouldn't have ignored it. ...really really nitpicky, but i wanted something more parallel to the first two lines. not a fan of the "it" at the end of "ignored", or of using any object there at all

When breathing took time
after she couldn't catch it....period?
exercising inhaling-exhaling
it has been settled to a notion.

Does it make her broken?

If obvious kept it's meaning,
she would have stayed near.
if love would of been,
she wouldn't of wanted. ...grammar check? just want to be sure

She knows her skin
enough to know
that it had been tainted
fingerprints can be evidence....this stanza really could be condensed. I don't think you need the "can be evidence"--"fingerprints" already carries that weight with it, at least for me

If innocence would have begged her,
she wouldn't have left.
if faith would of had purpose,..capital "I"
she would have been saved.

She brings hindsight
with her when she sleeps,
and when she sleeps
she dreams it. ...another stanza that could be shortened, really just to "she dreams hindsight"--it would also give you a stronger opportunity and space to elaborate

Does it make her broken?

If anything would have been visible,..."anything" strikes me as a little too broad
she wouldn't have taken her eyes off of it.
if destiny would have been friendly,
she wouldn't have been scared.

She was disavowed from the world.
existing upon it-she's no longer in it....period?
though she clasped the earth once...capital "t"
she stands on her toes to barely feel it.

If it just had been a thought,
would she still be thinking?
if she had truly knew it,
would she have known it?...a few too many "it's" and "know's" (extends into the next stanza as well)

She knows, she has to know
knowing is not always knowledge.
sometimes it is a place and a time
and when it happens, it is a memory.

Does this make her broken?

you are playing with a powerful, emotive, but ultimately futile word in If. i think it brings the reader to your side. at the same time, extending a piece on things that do not actually happen strikes me as being difficult, potentially. I had some questions about your grammar and punctuation, but those are relatively easy to look over. in general for now, i think the poem would benefit from cutting out some lines to make it feel a bit tighter and remove the excess