06-20-2012, 09:24 AM
Todd,
Many thanks for stopping by and saying the right things.
Version 2 is not what I will call a revision. I simply stripped and skimmed
and tweaked a bit. It did not work that well for me too. Nevertheless I
posted it. I want to better this poem and hence will take my chances.
Constructive feedback and suggestions will lead me there. And it will
happen.
Glad to see someone who has a thing for sonics. I understand when you say 'the perfect word'. May be I was trying too hard. I agree with almost everything you have said.
Hope to get back on this soon.
Thank you for your time again. Appreciate it.
Sumeet
Many thanks for stopping by and saying the right things.
Version 2 is not what I will call a revision. I simply stripped and skimmed
and tweaked a bit. It did not work that well for me too. Nevertheless I
posted it. I want to better this poem and hence will take my chances.
Constructive feedback and suggestions will lead me there. And it will
happen.
Glad to see someone who has a thing for sonics. I understand when you say 'the perfect word'. May be I was trying too hard. I agree with almost everything you have said.
Hope to get back on this soon.
Thank you for your time again. Appreciate it.
Sumeet