05-31-2012, 04:06 PM
two nits; garden of roses and the last two lines. the 1st is a large cliche the 2nd is something worse, though i can't remember what it 's called 
other than that i think it's a great edit. the rose and last line things weren't mentioned before because i'd already had my allotment used up for the mild crit forum but this is a fresh post so i mention them
as i said before, the way you edit is refreshing. as is the fact you still holding on to those caps
other than that i think it's a great edit. the rose and last line things weren't mentioned before because i'd already had my allotment used up for the mild crit forum but this is a fresh post so i mention them
as i said before, the way you edit is refreshing. as is the fact you still holding on to those caps