Where Dost Madness Dwell?

[billy]

Dost? (in the title) i found it hard to leave the line and continue.
you have lots of poetic lines at play but they feel overwhelming.
some of the cliche spoils some of the great lines. i think the last
6 lines are excellent while the preceding lines
fall over one another a little.

as for the bashing, it's not our aim
we do have a miscellaneous forum where you can dictate if you
want honest feedback or not and a for fun forum which as the name suggests
is a place to put poetry written just for the fun or joy of writing it.

thanks for the read