05-01-2012, 08:32 AM
Addy, I have not been a regular correspondent on this, and the suggestions I might make, would only be the kind of thing that I would do, such as repetitions, and that would therefore be my poem, not yours.
Unlike you, and others, I thought the first version rather good. This may be better, but really they are quite different creatures.
Unlike you, and others, I thought the first version rather good. This may be better, but really they are quite different creatures.