Do you feel it?

[Chaotic Body]

i'm still seeing the first stanza as the weakest link of the piece; I wanted a slightly more visible connection to the rest of the piece (it is probably there, but I'm failing to see it right now)

I don't think I tried in particular; just throwing together themes I feel are near each other in my head

I have a new version, thanks again for your comments, I need to sit and have a proper think about the theme to run through it.. shouldn't have posted such an incomplete thing maybe