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[tectak]

you cannot just leave out a word because it does not permit a reasonable rhythm to exist.

I don't understand
In songs, I know -just as in poems- you can leave a word off the end of a line or lyric, if the first thing that springs to mind fits
I think it's nice

Thanks for the input! I'm mulling over it

I do not agree that you can omit a functional word out of flippant desire to appear "nice"; and nor,ray, do I entirely support your defense that such pointless indulgence is ok because it is "poetic". We are trying to improve writing in these forums not by advocating laissez faire largesse but by pointing out transgressions from quality by eliminating mediocrity.
If anything goes then there go we all.
Best,
Tectak
Ps On a constructive note I am impressed by the dignity shown by "chaos" in the face of fairly searing criticism. As oft pointed out, criticism should be taken eclectically. Use the best and ignore the rest.