04-13-2012, 06:33 AM
Thanks, I will think about that first line some more
>I think "immature" is more indicative of what is being described.
What is maturity, then? Is it being content with the world as it is?
>Such phrases as "I'm tormented knowing you'll never understand me" or
Yeah I need a clear message which isn't there
>This reads more as prose than poetry
Okay, thanks again, maybe I should be posting it somewhere else
>I think "immature" is more indicative of what is being described.
What is maturity, then? Is it being content with the world as it is?
>Such phrases as "I'm tormented knowing you'll never understand me" or
Yeah I need a clear message which isn't there
>This reads more as prose than poetry
Okay, thanks again, maybe I should be posting it somewhere else