04-13-2012, 06:05 AM
The speaker says that he/she looks out from a womb of "narcissism and eternal sunshine" which doesn't add up to a meaningful image to me. Then what follows does not seem to be what a narcissistic personality would experience. I think "immature" is more indicative of what is being described.
Such phrases as "I'm tormented knowing you'll never understand me" or " I'm stronger today than yesterday" are a bit cliche, but then most things describing early adulthood (adolescence) angst tend to come across that way.
This reads more as prose than poetry, as there is little in the way of the tropes associated with poetry here, even in regard to free verse, as well as the absence of any rhythmical quality.
Dale
Such phrases as "I'm tormented knowing you'll never understand me" or " I'm stronger today than yesterday" are a bit cliche, but then most things describing early adulthood (adolescence) angst tend to come across that way.
This reads more as prose than poetry, as there is little in the way of the tropes associated with poetry here, even in regard to free verse, as well as the absence of any rhythmical quality.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.