John Holmes Is Dead

[Veronique]

ey!
well, it's a subject that gives plenty of lends itself to a lot of images...
that being said

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There was a purpose for John Holmes ...I get the intro, and like how it explains, but to me it limits the poem to description and makes it hard for action to occur. not necessarily a negative thing
and his 'Biff-Bam Thank-You Maam's,'
a method in his pendulating creed.
Propensity for kicking out the shams
of decency by a storehouse of salty seed. ..."storehouse of salty seed" works on many levels; good aesthetics, sounds, and meanings
Erections on cue. Forbearance damns,
stalls the act. The trick’s to enviate the normal size,
and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes....not an image i like picturing, but rather vivid for something that doesn't use too many words to create it
No matter if in film (or out beside a lake),
for power in the loins leads to give and take....considered shifting "in" to "of" ("in" seems to focus on more the "loins" themselves, treating them almost as a seed or container; "of" makes the "loins" feel more active). like the line, regardless
Contortions to admit the thing between her buns,
propinquity to her thighs. It's not the same old dance
for innocent Annabel and Sue. Blow the horns
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
A well-endowed man gives off succulent vibes.

v

enjoyable read
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Thanks so much for the comments. 'Of' is better for reasons
stated.
V