There was a purpose for John Holmes
and his 'Biff-Bam Thank-You Maam's,'
a method in his pendulating creed.
Propensity for kicking out the shams
of decency by a storehouse of salty seed.
Erections on cue. Forbearance damns,
stalls the act. The trick’s to enviate the normal size,
and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes.
No matter if in film (or out beside a lake),
for power in the loins leads to give and take.
Contortions to admit the thing between her buns,
propinquity to her thighs. It's not the same old dance
for innocent Annabel and Sue. Blow the horns
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
A well-endowed man gives off succulent vibes.

v

I'm so sheltered that I had to google John Holmes... now I'm almost too scared to do enough research to read the poem properly!

I will though. At first glance, love "the trick's to enviate the normal size, and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes" -- I will return when I've looked at a few more pictures...

(04-02-2012, 01:23 PM)Leanne Wrote:  I'm so sheltered that I had to google John Holmes... now I'm almost too scared to do enough research to read the poem properly!

I will though. At first glance, love "the trick's to enviate the normal size, and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes" -- I will return when I've looked at a few more pictures...

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lol

v

ey!
well, it's a subject that gives plenty of lends itself to a lot of images...
that being said

(04-02-2012, 01:21 PM)Veronique Wrote:  There was a purpose for John Holmes ...I get the intro, and like how it explains, but to me it limits the poem to description and makes it hard for action to occur. not necessarily a negative thing
and his 'Biff-Bam Thank-You Maam's,'
a method in his pendulating creed.
Propensity for kicking out the shams
of decency by a storehouse of salty seed. ..."storehouse of salty seed" works on many levels; good aesthetics, sounds, and meanings
Erections on cue. Forbearance damns,
stalls the act. The trick’s to enviate the normal size,
and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes....not an image i like picturing, but rather vivid for something that doesn't use too many words to create it
No matter if in film (or out beside a lake),
for power in the loins leads to give and take....considered shifting "in" to "of" ("in" seems to focus on more the "loins" themselves, treating them almost as a seed or container; "of" makes the "loins" feel more active). like the line, regardless
Contortions to admit the thing between her buns,
propinquity to her thighs. It's not the same old dance
for innocent Annabel and Sue. Blow the horns
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
A well-endowed man gives off succulent vibes.

v

enjoyable read

(04-03-2012, 09:13 AM)Philatone Wrote:  ey!
well, it's a subject that gives plenty of lends itself to a lot of images...
that being said

[quote='Veronique' pid='93615' dateline='1333340467']
There was a purpose for John Holmes ...I get the intro, and like how it explains, but to me it limits the poem to description and makes it hard for action to occur. not necessarily a negative thing
and his 'Biff-Bam Thank-You Maam's,'
a method in his pendulating creed.
Propensity for kicking out the shams
of decency by a storehouse of salty seed. ..."storehouse of salty seed" works on many levels; good aesthetics, sounds, and meanings
Erections on cue. Forbearance damns,
stalls the act. The trick’s to enviate the normal size,
and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes....not an image i like picturing, but rather vivid for something that doesn't use too many words to create it
No matter if in film (or out beside a lake),
for power in the loins leads to give and take....considered shifting "in" to "of" ("in" seems to focus on more the "loins" themselves, treating them almost as a seed or container; "of" makes the "loins" feel more active). like the line, regardless
Contortions to admit the thing between her buns,
propinquity to her thighs. It's not the same old dance
for innocent Annabel and Sue. Blow the horns
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
A well-endowed man gives off succulent vibes.

v

enjoyable read
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Thanks so much for the comments. 'Of' is better for reasons
stated.
V

(04-02-2012, 01:21 PM)Veronique Wrote:  There was a purpose for John Holmes
and his 'Biff-Bam Thank-You Maam's,'
a method in his pendulating creed.
Propensity for kicking out the shams
of decency by a storehouse of salty seed.
Erections on cue. Forbearance damns,
stalls the act. The trick’s to enviate the normal size,
and dangle it rising before a starlet's eyes.
No matter if in film (or out beside a lake),
for power in the loins leads to give and take.
Contortions to admit the thing between her buns,
propinquity to her thighs. It's not the same old dance
for innocent Annabel and Sue. Blow the horns
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
A well-endowed man gives off succulent vibes.

v

rock on king dong.

if the meter were tightened up it would make it even better.
i think you almost have a good sonnet here V. i like the content and even with the meter it flows well.
forever! for the head that bobs needs no bribes.
is a great line with more than one way of looking at it. would make a great epitaph.
i can't say i have any real nits as i like it as is.

I liked it, I think it's a lot more charming without the last 2 lines

But I don't know if the graphic details are already not a concern because of who this guy is.

It's like sex jokes in old TV cartoons that I keep hearing about
(the children hear it, like it but don't get the sexual points)
I just think you can have the best of both worlds there,
like the Hanging Tree song in The Hunger Games.. maybe not for this, I dunno

It takes a deep throat to swallow this poem.

John Holmes, like the Hydra, is never truly dead,
kill the one, and two pop up instead.

Outside of the "of" I have no picks. Very punny!

Dale