I'm Still Tying My Shoe

[Leanne]

Hello Vika, welcome back

Sunset

Escape of thoughts never
Completely contemplated

The mark of another word I failed
To say right

Sound of a prayer for light to see my way
Aware that I’m blind -- I really like this first half of the poem


Dawn

A shot from a gun to start the race -- I'm not sure you need to say "from a gun", just "a shot" would probably do
I’m still tying my shoe

It’s the hesitation to shoot the mocking bird
Singing my requiem -- this is lovely, very bitter and sad

Beginning of a life long journey -- perhaps just "beginning a lifelong journey" would do
That starts one step back -- great last line

The title seems a bit lacklustre, given that you have "I'm still tying my shoe" in the second half of the poem -- perhaps just "Untied" might give you a little more leeway.

Thanks for the read.