Converse

Converse

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01-17-2012, 02:21 AM

I like this. The only suggestion I have is

"Anything
that could be moved
was moved"

to

"Anything
that could be moved,
had been...

Dale

How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.

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Converse - by Philatone - 01-13-2012, 08:41 AM

RE: Converse - by addy - 01-13-2012, 05:19 PM

RE: Converse - by Philatone - 01-13-2012, 10:25 PM

RE: Converse - by Wildcard - 01-14-2012, 12:05 AM

RE: Converse - by Philatone - 01-16-2012, 01:35 PM

RE: Converse - by addy - 01-16-2012, 04:19 PM

RE: Converse - by Erthona - 01-17-2012, 02:21 AM

RE: Converse - by abu nuwas - 01-20-2012, 07:12 AM

RE: Converse - by popeye - 01-20-2012, 09:48 AM

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