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The Coming of the Magi
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12-28-2011, 01:01 PM
the terrier bit lost some flavor for me in the edit. also, personal preference, I liked the original third stanza's spacing a bit more; however, it could just be my reluctance for it to change? If anything, I think the "every year" works well in the first line, if I have to give some particulars
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The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-05-2011, 10:29 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by grannyjill - 12-06-2011, 06:03 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by heslopian - 12-07-2011, 04:12 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-07-2011, 04:38 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by grannyjill - 12-07-2011, 05:45 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-07-2011, 08:41 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by addy - 12-07-2011, 09:43 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-07-2011, 02:58 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Philatone - 12-15-2011, 07:40 AM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Aish - 12-15-2011, 12:21 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by rbl - 12-16-2011, 12:06 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Erthona - 12-16-2011, 02:48 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-19-2011, 03:38 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Leanne - 12-28-2011, 12:27 PM
RE: The Coming of the Magi - by Philatone - 12-28-2011, 01:01 PM
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