August spits and holds

[Leanne]

you dismiss all prominent apocalypse theories where saints prevail and shove the dining room in the closet.-- I like the idea of jumping straight into an accusation, but due to the grammar I'm not sure whether it's the saints who "prevail and shove the dining room in the closet" or it's "you... shove the dining room in the closet"

I know your restlessness, the tangled scent of red. there's nothing heroic about this. -- a desire for rebellion, or anarchy? Or just an incurable cynicism?

you're irresistible amongst flat tires, and the minutia of a daytime half-moon. -- it's not heroic, nothing one would consider a great thing to do, but the mundane really could do with a shake-up if only to add a bit of interest

Some really interesting ideas here. Your presentation is quite well handled other than that ambiguity of the first line -- I enjoyed the read, thank you.