12-17-2011, 01:26 AM
art in a can - I thought it was an interesting way to start off and it drew me in!
condensed cream of
tomato trope
posterised side by six
sides of marilyn - love this line!
beauty spotted modern snots
in pastel shards - this is one of my favorite images here - you've paired soft (pastel) and hard (shards) and it really has an impact
and sometimes
ultraviolet shades of red
cultured cunts
who see the tin for what it is - nice ending! You wrapped things up effectively.
I really enjoyed reading your poem. The ending was the best - the phrase "cultured cunts who see the tin for what it is" really made me stop, in a good way! It felt like that's exactly where the poem should end (and did).
condensed cream of
tomato trope
posterised side by six
sides of marilyn - love this line!
beauty spotted modern snots
in pastel shards - this is one of my favorite images here - you've paired soft (pastel) and hard (shards) and it really has an impact
and sometimes
ultraviolet shades of red
cultured cunts
who see the tin for what it is - nice ending! You wrapped things up effectively.
I really enjoyed reading your poem. The ending was the best - the phrase "cultured cunts who see the tin for what it is" really made me stop, in a good way! It felt like that's exactly where the poem should end (and did).

