modern (c word, content)
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art in a can - I thought it was an interesting way to start off and it drew me in!
condensed cream of
tomato trope
posterised side by six
sides of marilyn - love this line!
beauty spotted modern snots
in pastel shards - this is one of my favorite images here - you've paired soft (pastel) and hard (shards) and it really has an impact
and sometimes
ultraviolet shades of red
cultured cunts
who see the tin for what it is - nice ending! You wrapped things up effectively.

I really enjoyed reading your poem. The ending was the best - the phrase "cultured cunts who see the tin for what it is" really made me stop, in a good way! It felt like that's exactly where the poem should end (and did).
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modern (c word, content) - by billy - 12-15-2011, 03:35 AM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by Philatone - 12-15-2011, 07:07 AM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by Aish - 12-15-2011, 12:35 PM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by billy - 12-15-2011, 07:00 PM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by Aish - 12-16-2011, 04:57 AM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by Erthona - 12-16-2011, 11:38 AM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by billy - 12-16-2011, 07:03 PM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by Philatone - 12-16-2011, 10:39 PM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by billy - 12-16-2011, 11:45 PM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by rbl - 12-17-2011, 01:26 AM
RE: modern (c word, content) - by billy - 12-23-2011, 01:45 AM



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